This was great! I gotta say that if this is written by you guys, you are super self aware for “teens.” It’s brilliant. It is a great balance of weird with character work and story. I never felt you were being weird for the sake of weird. It all felt like there was a purpose…that you had decided to make these choices. For a group your age, I am super impressed with your concepts and their execution. I love the ice cream and the mom. Again, it’s so bizarre but totally believable in the world you have created. What makes you different from most teenagers trying to do sketch is that you aren’t being selfish. You are actually trying to create a good sketch rather than writing one about farts and then get each other tickled and spazzing out on the floor and then turn off the camera. This isn’t polished, professional level stuff, but the potential is there and I think you guys are ahead of the game for a new, young group. Bravo guys and girls.
THE GOOD
Your piece was really well conceived filmically. How old are the two of you? You have a great sense of pacing and composition for comedy. I particularly enjoyed the face-painting montage, and the opening shot of crawling out of the dryer.
THE BAD
I didn’t really understand the premise initially, and in a short piece like this, you should be able to understand what’s going on right away. At the Upright Citizens Brigade, they call this the “game” of the scene – it’s the central idea and pattern which builds throughout. Focus more on your writing – what’s the joke? How can the joke grow throughout the scene? What’s the punchline? Did someone change or grow, or was there a big joke to top it all off?
THE GOOD
Lots of energy. Plenty of energy. Buckets of energy, in fact.
THE BAD
The kind of energy that you get when you’re on a sugar high from inhaling Kool-aid right from the packet. This clip made me feel as though I were at a slumber party and I so didn’t want to be there.
THE UGLY
Hey, the mom is played by a guy. An ugly guy. Isn’t that hi-larious? Dude looks like a lady again – only he doesn’t. Get it? Get it get it get it get it get it? Oops, sorry, I was getting a contact sugar high.
What a great job you did....I look forward to seeing what you do in round three...you have got our vote...very talented kids...do you do your own editing on your vids???...good luck to yas...
When the girl hit the kid in the face that made me laugh out loud. I like your quirky flair for comedy. The fact that the kid was wrapped up in the washing machine for four hours made me laugh too. You have that something that makes me want to keep watching. Keep it up.
hey, I was just noticing that you 3 are about the only group that aren't already involved with a professional group!! The judges should totally see that you kids are doing everything by yourselves, and that you have tons of natural talent!!!
finally, a good family-friendly, wholesome, funny video!! That Audrey Noland's website is SCARY, and definitely not for anyone under the age of, let's say, ummmmm...... 75!!! Talk about a potty mouth! MAN!!! Hope you guys make it to the American public eye and become the next big stars!!! lol
And, thanks for not saying the F-bomb not even once!!!
OK, I know you guys are waiting to use LUCAS in your round 3 video, because you guys know that then you will win the entire competition easily! I hope you guys totally get your own TV show, because you'll be instant celebrities!!!
Obviously, dino2 is an Audrey Noland fan who is probably 50 and still flippin' hamburgers at mickey D's for a living!! JKL rocks, and, yeah, Maria is HOT!!!
This was great! I gotta say that if this is written by you guys, you are super self aware for “teens.” It’s brilliant. It is a great balance of weird with character work and story. I never felt you were being weird for the sake of weird. It all felt like there was a purpose…that you had decided to make these choices. For a group your age, I am super impressed with your concepts and their execution. I love the ice cream and the mom. Again, it’s so bizarre but totally believable in the world you have created. What makes you different from most teenagers trying to do sketch is that you aren’t being selfish. You are actually trying to create a good sketch rather than writing one about farts and then get each other tickled and spazzing out on the floor and then turn off the camera. This isn’t polished, professional level stuff, but the potential is there and I think you guys are ahead of the game for a new, young group. Bravo guys and girls.
THE GOOD Your piece was really well conceived filmically. How old are the two of you? You have a great sense of pacing and composition for comedy. I particularly enjoyed the face-painting montage, and the opening shot of crawling out of the dryer. THE BAD I didn’t really understand the premise initially, and in a short piece like this, you should be able to understand what’s going on right away. At the Upright Citizens Brigade, they call this the “game” of the scene – it’s the central idea and pattern which builds throughout. Focus more on your writing – what’s the joke? How can the joke grow throughout the scene? What’s the punchline? Did someone change or grow, or was there a big joke to top it all off?
THE GOOD Lots of energy. Plenty of energy. Buckets of energy, in fact. THE BAD The kind of energy that you get when you’re on a sugar high from inhaling Kool-aid right from the packet. This clip made me feel as though I were at a slumber party and I so didn’t want to be there. THE UGLY Hey, the mom is played by a guy. An ugly guy. Isn’t that hi-larious? Dude looks like a lady again – only he doesn’t. Get it? Get it get it get it get it get it? Oops, sorry, I was getting a contact sugar high.
I just wanted to add that I really think the lot of you should stick with this. You really have a lot of potential and did a great job.
What a great job you did....I look forward to seeing what you do in round three...you have got our vote...very talented kids...do you do your own editing on your vids???...good luck to yas...
u guys better make it... or else
the guy above me is FUNNY TALKING DOESNT KNOW WHAT OR WHO HE'S TALKING ABOUT! LOL you guys are awesome! and to add in im 21
I think when you guys get a little older, you'll have a lot of talent. Right now, it's just really rough around the edges. It's like an ADD acid trip.
HAAAAA I LOVED STACEY'S MOM PART AND THE SLAPPING! BEST VIDEO YET DUDE!
your guys top all the other vids!!! WAY TA GO!
you two (or three) are different from all the other videos their original and you all aren't as professional you guys also are hilarious! GOOD LUCK!!!
you better win, or all give the judges a piece of my mind BECAUSE IM PHYSCO
OMG, I CAN'T BELIEVE IT!!! THIS IS THE BEST VID EVA! WHOOPIE i never heard of you guys before, i cant wait to see you when your famous
When the girl hit the kid in the face that made me laugh out loud. I like your quirky flair for comedy. The fact that the kid was wrapped up in the washing machine for four hours made me laugh too. You have that something that makes me want to keep watching. Keep it up.
hey, I was just noticing that you 3 are about the only group that aren't already involved with a professional group!! The judges should totally see that you kids are doing everything by yourselves, and that you have tons of natural talent!!!
finally, a good family-friendly, wholesome, funny video!! That Audrey Noland's website is SCARY, and definitely not for anyone under the age of, let's say, ummmmm...... 75!!! Talk about a potty mouth! MAN!!! Hope you guys make it to the American public eye and become the next big stars!!! lol And, thanks for not saying the F-bomb not even once!!!
I'll be looking for you right after Hannah Montana or The Suite Life of Zack and Cody on DISNEY soon!
OK, I know you guys are waiting to use LUCAS in your round 3 video, because you guys know that then you will win the entire competition easily! I hope you guys totally get your own TV show, because you'll be instant celebrities!!!
Also, I think in round 3 they'll put Lucas back in, because you know that Jon and Katie live in a completely different state than Lucas!
Obviously, dino2 is an Audrey Noland fan who is probably 50 and still flippin' hamburgers at mickey D's for a living!! JKL rocks, and, yeah, Maria is HOT!!!
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